Wanna give me feedback on the new "Robot Stories" trailer?

[gregpak]

Hey, you guys. We're recutting our "Robot Stories" trailer and I'd be hugely appreciative to anyone willing to view it and post comments/criticisms. We're planning to lock picture in a few days.

It's viewable online, in Quicktime: http://www.robotstories.net/blog/000185.html

Many thanks and all the best!

[gregpak]

Okay, we have a newer cut of the trailer -- please feel free to check it out and post your comments:

http://www.robotstories.net/blog/index.html

We're still cutting, so your feedback would be much appreciated!

[Rick Popko]

Wow, I'm impressed. Nice shooting. Very professional-looking production values. The only thing I can think of would be to linger on the press quotes towards the end. They come up nicely, then drop off a beat too quick. Other than that, nice job.
-Rick

[the-lyons-dendo]

yep nice job. the "coming atcha" text however got to be a little too much there on the end credits screen but really im just being picky. i liked it.

[gregpak]

Thanks a bunch for the feedback! The final trailer is up at http://www.robotstories.net/trailer.html

Rock on.

[serano9]

I'm always completly honest and a perfectionist so here goes the feedback. The white text- I would make sure you do some shadowing to separate the text from the background in the scenes where you have your day shots and white text. The length of text- The rule of thumb is that you should be able to read a text slate three times over before it goes away. Thats kind of long, but I think you should leave your text slates and the end up for longer. Especially you last slate with the final info on it. Watch any hollywood trailer. If you don't want to leave the text up for very long on the awards you've won, maybe just leave the title- for instance BEST PICTURE, then the festival but maybe don't bother with all that small text unless you want the slate up longer. Other than that I think you're good. It's better than most Indie trailers I've seen. OK i'm amending this post. I think I saw you oldest trailer first. It looks like you text slates are better now but still, there is shot when he's walking down the street and the text is not separated from the light day scene. Shadowing will help. The text should be the foreground. I don't know if you should bother with the Written and directed by at the end of the trailer. Check my trailer out. I just leave them not knowing at the end. It seems better that way. thats just me though. Like I said the trailer is good though. Better than most Indies I've seen and I'm very picky. Good job.

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